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Post by Dragon_Stalker on Jan 5, 2012 1:52:39 GMT -5
Once there was an adventurer Brave as any there were Who roamed the realm of DC In search of fine silver Though brave he was, he certainly Was no sweet talker His main concern was killing dragons In fact, he was a stalker The name he earned so long ago Became known across the land As he slew the beast again and again And lent his helping hand Few knew not, though, of those first plans To earn an epic name One that struck fear into hearts of dragons It surely couldn't be lame The perfect name he sought Had already been taken But after years of waiting patiently That hero would finally awaken Please welcome now to our world The awesomely named player A brainchild of the stalker who shall be named Dragon_Slayer Thanks Gawayn for the editing notes
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Irishman
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Post by Irishman on Jan 5, 2012 15:01:40 GMT -5
Nicely done, D_S
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Bre'Cheye
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ussta zhennu ventash'ma zhah ussta zhennu abbil... My Great Leader is my Great Friend!
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Post by Bre'Cheye on Jan 5, 2012 15:49:48 GMT -5
indeed
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Post by Gawayn on Jan 5, 2012 23:55:19 GMT -5
Not too bad, good sir. You keep pretty well to your rhyme scheme and rhythm, and it's direct and straightforward. I certainly enjoyed the read!
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Post by Dragon_Stalker on Jan 6, 2012 6:12:37 GMT -5
I appreciate the feedback, and I'll remember next time to consult Gawayn during the 5 minute brainstorming process that it takes to write these things I've made the changes you suggested and look forward to reading the works for a true wordsmith in the next few days.
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Post by Gawayn on Jan 6, 2012 11:32:00 GMT -5
I simply wanted it to be the best that it could be. It's quite nice. That could be a fun topic to start...everyone compose an "origin" poem for their name/main?
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Bre'Cheye
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ussta zhennu ventash'ma zhah ussta zhennu abbil... My Great Leader is my Great Friend!
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Post by Bre'Cheye on Jan 6, 2012 19:16:54 GMT -5
that's a scary thought for my name
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Post by Gawayn on Jan 6, 2012 20:04:13 GMT -5
You could do one for Fade, right?
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